Honest opinion please

[Moe]

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=453870


just uploaded a song its called day dream..i'm feeling it but its a rough draft and just been recording it a bit today...PLEASE give any any feedback on it lyrics weird where you think im off time voice weird etc... any suggestions etc. would be greatly apreciated! thx !

[Cozmo D]

OK...1st...be careful what you ask for. ;)

2nd... I like the 2nd verse better than the 1st. :)

[Moe]

heh i freestyled the 2nd one...and used just one other multi track on it. go figure compared to writing and using 3

[Cozmo D]

Yes... go figure... :)